Maybe I am - that's just part of my shy personality. But it felt indeed reassuring to know that there's someone who would eventually smoothen out my phrasing in those cases where it would get awkward.


Well, if you insist...

I think that, to establish our credibility, you could point her to Kana: Little Fanfics and Kana: Fanfic Flash, just to let her know that we're reputable and long-standing KLS fans. =)

http://kana.darklingnet.com/
http://www.the-z-projects.com/kana/

And of course, please let her know that if there are any changes she feels are necessary (ie where we've misinterpreted something), we'll be happy to make those changes. And that if she doesn't want the translations up at all, we will take them down, of course.

Guess what: that's exactly what I had in mind to tell her. Looks like we're thinking with one accord here once again...

Yay for creative synchronicity! I've enjoyed working on this project with you, Bookworm. =)

The pleasure's been all mine, thank you.

After facing some technical difficulties, I finally managed to send a message to Sakura-san today. She already replied and told me it's okay with her, as long as we don't use her work commercially. So now we're officially permitted to put up our scanlation. I'm going to send you the whole text of Sakura-san's message by e-mail tonight.

Wow, that was prompt of her. And she's not even going to be control freaky about it? Impressive. =)

And she even gave us permission to translate the other fifteen comics about Kana she created, too. But I'm not yet sure if I want to do that...

Fif...fif...FIFTEEN! *Slumps over and passes out*

Yes, in total it's sixteen Kana stories Sakura-san wrote. You can have a look at them at her website; they're listed below the heading 加奈～いもうと (Kana - Imōto).

I noticed that Sakura-san recomposed some of the later pages of the doujin when she redrew it - the 'I love you' moment takes up a two-page spread now.

Also, on the second-last graphic, there seems to be something that amounts to an author's note from her. Think you could tell us what it says, Bookworm? =)


I've been away from my computer for the past few days, but now that I'm back I've made these changes. I take it that there was nothing else that jumped out at you?

It's true, she applied some changes in the new version. There were a few panels added, and she also changed the text here and there. In the case you mentioned, right after the scene with Kana saying 愛してます (aishitemasu - I love you), Sakura-san added a panel with Kana going えへへ (ehehe - giggling).


All right, I'm going to try to figure out the meaning, but it may take a little time.


No, I think that I mentioned all those things I had noticed when looking through the translation by now.

It took a while, but finally I figured out a translation of the afterword Sakura-san added to the new version of her first Kana comic. I'm not really sure if I interpreted the grammatical structure of the long sentence in the first panel correctly, though. But I think this way at least it makes some sense.

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1st panel

こんにちは

Konnichiwa.

Good afternoon.

佐倉フーロです。
最後まで
読んでくれて
ありがとう
ございます。

Sakura Fūro desu.
Saigomade
yonde kurete
arigatō
gozaimasu.

I am Sakura Fūro. Thank you very much for reading until the end.

Sound:
ペコ

Peko

(Bow)

今回は２００３年に描いた
「加奈」をリフォーム
してみました。

Konkaiwa nisensannenni egaita
'Kana'o rifōmu
shite mimashita.

This time you saw a made over 'Kana' drawn in 2003.

人物だけ
ペン入れ直せば
イイヤって、
思っていたんですけど

Jinbotsu dake
pen'ire naoseba
iiyatte
omotte itandesu kedo

Although I intended to redraw the figures only,

やってみると
意外と大変でした
もちろん、
途中で後悔しました。

yattemiruto
igaito taihen deshita
mochiron,
tochūde kōkai shimashita.

when I tried, certainly it was unexpectedly difficult, I regretted it on the way.


2nd panel

え！？
新作を描け？

E!?
Shinsakuo egake?

What? Draw a new work?

アー
アー
キコエ
ナーイ

Ā
ā
kikoe
nāi

Oh no, I can't hear.

次回は新作を
出したいと
思っています。

Jikaiwa shinsakuo
deshitaito
omotte imasu.

I intend to publish a new work next time.


3rd panel

ま、それはさておき
次のページに
おまけがあります。

Ma, sorewa sateoki
tsugino pējini
omakega arimasu.

Well, apart from that, on the next page there's a bonus.

じゃ、
またねぇ

Ja,
matanē.

Well then, see you!

I guess she means she thought it was going to be simple just to redraw the characters (and not the backgrounds), but it ended up being harder than she'd expected and she ended up regretting it?

Thanks for the translation; it's interesting to see what she had to say. =)

Yes, that's how I would understand that sentence, too. But I'm not yet sure about the grammatical function of the expression イイヤって (iiyatte) there, so it's probably recommendable to ask Gotō-san about that.

Thanks to Gotō-san, who was so nice to explain the grammatical structure of this sentence to me, now I've got a better understanding. Indeed I misunderstood the イイヤって (iiyatte). And もちろん (mochiron) belongs to the third part of the sentence. So in the end it should look like this:

人物だけ
ペン入れ直せば
イイヤって、
思っていたんですけど

Jinbotsu dake
pen'ire naoseba
iiyatte
omotte itandesu kedo

I thought it would be sufficient to redraw the figures only,

やってみると
意外と大変でした
もちろん、
途中で後悔しました。

yattemiruto
igaito taihen deshita
mochiron,
tochūde kōkai shimashita.

but when I had a go at it, it turned out to be more difficult than I had expected; of course I regretted to have started with it.